My (former) life as the crab

Musings about life after Crabby Office Lady

This is just to say… July 29, 2011

Filed under: Bian's writing,Uncategorized,Writing — Annik @ 3:00 pm
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I was a Creative writing/poetry/Theater major in college; it prepared me for a life of waiting tables so I went back to grad school and now look at me (no; please don’t).

But that is not the point.

The point is, one of my favorite poems of all time was written by a poet/physician named William Carlos Williams. Here is it, and underneath it, Bian’s take on it.



This is just to say, by William Carlos Williams

PlumsI have eaten
the plums
that were in
the icebox

and which
you were probably
for breakfast

Forgive me
they were delicious
so sweet
and so cold

This is just to say, by Bian Stahl

I have just eaten
All the Jolly Ranchers
In the cupboard

and which you were probably
for movie night

forgive me
there so sweet
so nice
and a good treat.


(Now I love Bian’s version for a couple of reasons: 1) because the kid as a sense of humor like her mamma; 2) Everyone knows I adore my cherry Jolly Ranchers and that B and I have movie night every Friday night, come hell or high water.


Now here is Kenneth Koch’s version (one of them; he had many. Mr. Koch died in 2002. I wish I could have met him and riffed with him on this theme):

 Variations on a theme by William Carlos Williams (by Kenneth Koch)

I chopped down the house that you had been saving to live in next summer.
I am sorry, but it was morning, and I had nothing to do
and its wooden beams were so inviting.

The Beatles in the hollyhocksWe laughed at the hollyhocks together
and then I sprayed them with lye.
Forgive me. I simply do not know what I am doing.

I gave away the money that you had been saving to live on for the next ten years.
The man who asked for it was shabby
and the firm March wind on the porch was so juicy and cold.

Last evening we went dancing and I broke your leg.
Forgive me. I was clumsy and
I wanted you here in the wards, where I am the doctor!




5 Responses to “This is just to say…”

  1. Steve Stahl Says:

    Cherry Jolly Ranchers are my favorite food group. Ever.

    • Annik Says:

      Bian says: “So you DO have something in common!” which makes me realize that I haven’t explained things well AT ALL. (Note to the cleverly verbal SAS: this is the kid’s blog as well as mine and so…she checks the comments.)

      Mexico oughta be…..a trip, eh? Please wearnthent-shirts—justna few hours,on a plane.

      Xanax/Valium/Tequila combo: here we come! (If I must share…I must!)

  2. Natira Says:

    This is pure amazingness and Bian’s take is genius! Love you guys lots.

  3. I have refrained from
    eating the plums
    that were in
    the icebox

    as we haven’t
    had an icebox
    in many moons
    and the plums are now
    not sweet

    Thanks for the invitation to create!

  4. This is positively delish. Thank you so much for sharing your creative juices with us.

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